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删去下列句子中不必要的成分,把句子改写得更简洁。1)Upon

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删去下列句子中不必要的成分,把句子改写得更简洁。1)Upon examining our records,it seems that you have forgotten to file the personal data form which is required.2)All applicants who are interested in the job are obligated to provide the names of three references whom we can write to for evaluations of your job performance.3)He spoke as if he were feeling angry about the proposal that was recently suggested concerning promotion policies.4)The manager who is most experienced and with the greatest effi ciency,it seems obvious,should be given consideration for being promoted first.5)The vice president was a woman who had graduated from law school and with long experience in the business world.6)After having presented the annual report,the announcement about the merger was made by the president.7)The convention which was scheduled for the month of January wascancelled due to the fact that there were restrictions placed on trayel.8)The salesperson told us that we should write tO the main office directly for whatever information we were in need of.9)The brochure was written by the advertising manager,who then had it printed before mailing it to customers.10)We are writing in order to inform you of the alteration in our plans for convening on May 2,1995.11)It is apparent that the above date is not advantageous,and we have ascertained that May 5,1995,is a more convenient date for the three speakers whom we have asked tO address the meeting.12)We will attempt to ascertain the advisability of utilizing the central office for the meeting,and if we can,we will let you know.13)Your request was considered carefully by the committee,and it was decided to give an affirmative answer.14)Please advise US as to the possibility of your being free tO aecompany Mr.Jones to the district meeting.15)We are absolutely sure that Mr.Jones has an opportunity to advance in the company because of the fact that he is a man of experienee and of creativity.16)It goes without saying that we are acquainted with your policy onfiling tax returns,and we have every intention of complying withthe regulations which you have stated.17)Due to the dearth of paper,we are compelled to impose restrictions on the number of mailings.18)In addition tO this fact,as far as the budget is concerned.we must remember that it allows US only$200 a month for postage.19)It is necessary for US to inform you that the services of our research department that we formerly offered will be discontinued.20)I assumed that you will need approximately two weeks for the colleetion of data which will be incorporated into the reDon.21)My job is the management of the three offices which are located in the city,and I am expected tO participate in all planning sessions in addition tO visiting foreign plants.22)In regard to your inquiry,we are very sure that the material we are sending concerning career opportunities in New York under separate cover will be beneficial.23)In the event that you cannot accept our invitation to come to the meeting,we would appreciate your informing us of this fact as soon as possible.24)Unfortunately,after reviewing your proposal,we regretfully must inform you of our decision not to participate at this time.25)We trust that you will concur with our understanding of what the billing statement should be;however,should you require additional information,please do not hesitate to contact us.

答案解析

1)We find that you have forgotten to file the required personal data form

原句里有一个悬浮修饰语Upon examining our records,其逻辑主语应该是we,但是句子中的形式主语却是it;因此可以改成We find that.另外,把定语从句which is required改成一个前置形容词,省略了两个词。

2)All applicants for the job must provide three references

求职者肯定是对这个工作感兴趣的,因此没有必要说who are interested in the job。另外,be obligated to do. 这个短语太正式古板,也很冗长,不如说must。还有reference一词不仅可指推荐信,也可指推荐人,证明人等。

3)He spoke angrily about the recent proposal on promotion policies

把as if feeling angry缩写成一个副词,另外把定语从句that was recently suggested缩写成前置形容词recent。

4)Obvioudy,the most experienced and efficient manager should be considered first for promotion.

我们把插入语it seems obvious改为一个修饰全句的副词;另外,定语从句who is most experienced and with the greatest efficiencv是不平行结构,并列连词and前后的句子成分不一样,前面是从句,后面却是介词短语。最后,for being promoted是个很笨拙的表达方式,不如直接说for promotion。

5)The vice—president,a woman graduate from a law sch001.had long experience in business.

原句里含有一个不平行结构who had graduated from law school and with long experience in the business world.

6)The president presented the annual report and then announced the merger.

这个句子含有一个悬浮修饰语After haying presented the annual report;另外,原句用被动语态显得很笨拙,不如用主动语态简洁有力。

7)The convention scheduled for January was cancelled owing tO travel restrictions

从句which was scheduled for.被改写成一个由动词的过去分词构成的后置定语,for the month of January直接改成for January.

due to the fact that是累赘语(deadwood),restrictions Dlaced on travel可以改成travel restrictions。

8)The salesperson told US to write to the main office directlv for information

我们把宾语从句that we should write to. 改成由动词不定式构成的宾语补足语。

9)The advertising manager wrote the brochure,had it printed and mailed to customers

这个句子改为主动态更为简洁流畅。

lO)We are writing tO inform you of the change in our plans for the meeting on May 2,1995.

符合介词in order to可以缩短为to就行了。以下句子由你自己分析,不再加评论。

11)The above date is not suitable,and we have found that May 5,1995 is more convenient for the three speakers to address the meeting.

12)We will trv tO find out whether it is wise to use the central office for the meeting and let you know.

13)The committee considered your request carefully and approved it

14)Please let US know whether you can accompany Mr.Jones to the district meeting.

15)We are absolutely sure that Mr.Jones,experienced and creative, has an opportunity to advance in the company.

16)We certainly know your policy on filing tax returns and intend to obey the stated regulations.

17)Paper shortage has forced US to limit our correspondence.

18)Besides,the monthly postage budget is only$200.

19)We must inform you that our research department will no longer provide services.

20)You may need two weeks to collect data for that report.

21)I manage the three offices in the city,attend all planning sessions and visit foreign plants

22)We believe the material on career opportunities in New York we are sending separately will help you.

23)If you can’t attend the meeting.please let us know as soon as possible.

24)We regret tO inform you that we don’t want to participate now.

25)We believe the bill is correct,but contact us if you need more information

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